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Chapter 0 of A Journey Most Long

The Longest Journey


This is the first entry in my contribution to Tyrdal's Longest Journey project: a short story told in five chapters over five months. If this project interests you, click the link below. And if this intro whets your appetite, follow Waking Materia to stay up-to-date! Please enjoy!  
The longest journey - A traveller’s challenge
Generic article | Jan 8, 2025

Cholmedrine Elit-Ondra sat at the edge of the chair, leg pumping, smoking his pipe so fiercely his head was barely visible in the cloud of smoke. He turned his gaze out the window, glared analytically at the one old woman on the road below and, satisfied she was no threat, returned his eyes to the door. It was two minutes past the appointed time. Had something happened? Should he flee?

Just as he was planning his escape out the window, the envelope arrived beneath the door. Cholm counted to ten—ten torturous seconds—then loped across the room and snatched the letter as if rescuing it from a fire. After a brief scan of the contents he let out a moan. His pipe drooped from his mouth like a sad flower.

Waking Materia. He had heard of it. By all accounts a giant swamp in the far reaches of the Silurian Eighth where one must sail primitive tallships past colossal monsters and hauntstorms to get anywhere. Has the Daybreak Empire expanded that far already? Surely not. And even if they did, what would they want with a giant, haunted ring of boggy islands?

He would need good boots, he decided.

Tearing the letter into swallowable pieces, Cholm attempted to to recall what he had done to deserve such an assignment. To his annoyance, a few good candidates sprang immediately to mind, then a few more. But did the punishment fit the crime? If his shady employers didn't appreciate him defenestrating their informants, perhaps they should have given him the stress leave he asked for. But these were busy times for the Victorious Noontide. The heroes must be as tireless as the villains. And no villain was as tireless as Daybreak.

Cholm shook the self-pity from his head. His pipe returned to an agressive, upright position. He knew what must be done. It was time to hit the trails. Time for justice. Time for shopping.
 
 

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Oct 8, 2024 19:56

Congratulations on completing the first chapter of "The longest journey". As promised, here is a little memento to remember your travels - I hope to see you in chapter 2!  

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Oct 10, 2024 22:26 by Alan Byers

Thanks Tyrdal! Great work on this!

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Oct 15, 2024 19:28

Thank you so much! Unfortunately, there was a slight mixup with the article link for chapter 2. Here is the correct link for Chapter 2. Hope to see you there!

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Oct 9, 2024 00:07 by Imagica

The final sentence though... Just beautiful!

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Oct 10, 2024 22:26 by Alan Byers

Before any adventure always ask yourself: can you afford new boots?

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Oct 9, 2024 18:19 by CoolG

Ooh I wonder why he was selected for the mission :O   Great story, Alan!

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Oct 10, 2024 22:25 by Alan Byers

Thanks CoolG! He's a spaz but his credentials will reveal themselves.

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Nov 1, 2024 15:35

A great article in which you tell us a lot in just a few words and get straight to the point. I'm looking forward to the adventure. Oh, and I think the title and the last three sentences are great; they form a very good alpha and omega, or a unity, at least if I interpret it that way.

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Mar 16, 2025 18:51

Going to read the whole story now in one big swoop. This first introduction already makes me curious about how your story will unfold :)