The Romtol Civil War
The man lay before me, my blade in his gut— he was dying. Similar scenes were playing out all around me, as my comrades cheered, our enemies beaten. A sullen smile came upon the man's lips, and he struggled to speak. "Let us drink again one day, sister." he said, and promptly expired. Not a drop of alcohol has touched my lips since.The Romtol Civil War occurred in 3452, and lasted a mere six months, sparked by the disappearance of a head of the Poggok— blamed on one of the other four families, the Rocholdomn. In truth, she had been discovered to be a tether by the Cichuelizon, and was assassinated using Eldritch magics. The war itself was forced to a close by the annual burning of Rotomul.
A reminder
The scorched theatre remains today as a reminder of the war. It stands in the portion of Mouch that had been burned by the Poggok, though through some miracle, the theatre remained standing despite half of the edifice having been scorched. Plays are still performed on its half-burned stage, with an audience filling the untouched portion of its seating.Remove these ads. Join the Worldbuilders Guild
So first, I like the touch of the theater being there as a reminder. It adds alot of flavor to how the war impacted the people involved. kinda scary thinking about performing on a half burnt stage, though. I like the overall article, and really enjoyed the bit on how they lied to citizens lol. I noticed a lack of famous battles. Is the battle over mouch the only main conflict?
Thanks! You can probably tell wars aren't my forte. This is my first actual war article thus far. I've been avoiding them since I don't get particularly excited about war in most media (not to mention real life), always been somewhat boring to me— so I made this more politics/history focused as that's what interests me. I don't really read/watch much about wars as they don't tend to appeal to me— so there's a lot less to draw and learn from on my end. This won't be the last one though, as wars are an important part of history, I will have to write more in time— and I'll want to do them right. Do you have any recommendations to check out? Honestly I have no idea how I'd even write out famous battles, that's how much I'm out of tune with this particular topic. Like, one sentence bits that say "On the 14th the Battle of Red was fought over the hill?" or is there more to it than that?
This is pretty good, don't sell yourself short if you feel out of your depth. It's perfectly fine. Politics and culture are often overlooked when dealing with war. You did it right in my book. As far as recommendations for battles and wars: You can't go wrong with Dhelian. He's won best conflict in WE two years in a row (2018-2019) https://www.worldanvil.com/w/lethea-dhelian/a/battle-of-the-lipsig-hills You also have darkseid who has come faorly close along with myself on in the same category. Both he and I were runner-up/honorable mentions in WE 2019. Lemme grab those here. https://www.worldanvil.com/w/expedition-demeter-Dylonishere123/a/the-battle-of-the-gods-grave-militaryConflict https://www.worldanvil.com/w/a-shattered-empire---vardania-darkseid/a/feran-invasion-of-vardania-article They are also very good at giving information on tactics as well. Just great writers in general. Hope it isn't out of place to post them here. I definitely understand wanting to get it right. I did what you did, I stuck to what interests me. Story. When I wrote it I wanted to focus on the story of the battle rather than a deep analysis of tactics and a bunch of numbers. I didn't worry about how many troops one side had over the other, only the events, and it did suprosingly well. Hope this helps you in the future! Again, its a good article!
Thanks! I'll give Dhelian's stuff a look-see, alongside your article. I am very familiar with Darkseid's work already, probably the only person who's war articles have kept me well invested— one of my favorites on WA. Thinking back to their articles helped me with this one. Taking an actual study-look wouldn't hurt! Thanks for the encouragement, it's a bit of a new area that I'd like to get better with. I don't want to get into tactics/troops/numbers more than a handful of times as that's especially uninteresting to me. Small fights between ~10 or less people? I can do that, just the giant battle stuff is...ugh. All that said it'll likely be a little while before I write another war, just don't have a ton in my to-write list yet— as I haven't really properly sprinkled them throughout Qet's history quite yet!
I wish you luck! I look forward to reading them when you do them! I feel the same on larger battles they are kind of stressful when I think about themXD