Homebound

I'm going to try and get today's comment out early! I noticed you said that it picks up a lot from Atlas Falls, so let's see if you can top the amazingness that was Atlas Falls.  

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Mouse stepped out of the shuttle. Roadrunner followed close behind. They were escorted onto a massive platform with at least forty other wayfarers.

This isn't a great hook. The sentence structure is repeated three times in a row and there's very little description to latch onto. It's very matter of the fact and doesn't have too much style to it. This is especially accentuated by it being the first few lines of the article.  

Miranda threw her arms up into the air, and the hum of chatter died out. When all were silenced, her arms fell to her side. "Sorry for such short notice, but there's a situation. Three hours ago, we detected a massive energy spike in sector 487, level 17."

Two smaller things here. Firstly, the motion that Miranda makes. What is its significance and how did everyone notice it if they weren't staring at her. Rather than feeling like a commanding moment, it feels like something that an annoyed teacher would do, waiting for the chatter to come to a stop. The other thing is, consider adding an adjective to "situation" as it could clarify the type of situation and potentially add something to the line.  

"You have a damn army," someone screamed from the crowd. Miranda scoffed and crossed her arms, "you want an army of grunts gallivanting around all that sensitive machinery. Even the smallest amount of collateral damage could sentence us all to extinction." She shook her head, "You're smarter than that, and so are we."

I picked up on a few somethings here. Firstly, the last line is semi misleading and confusing as you're now separating an unknown we from an unknown you. I could take it that the we refers to all Wayfarers and the you is an isolation pronoun for the one who screamed or I could take it she is referring to all of those watching as a royal you and then speaking of a mysterious we. The other thing that I noticed is that you never say the tone or way in which Miranda speaks, which is a bit strange as it now makes me think of a calm demand, but that directly contradicts the idea of there being tons of people in a large space. >How does she communicate with all of them?  

They know Echoes

You capitalize Echoes (also it appears to be a yet unpublished article) which leaves the question. Is this a proper noun, if so what type. I would expect it to need the supporting article "the" as "the Echoes" would be something specific. Alternatively, echoes may not need capitalization or be a purlized form of an Echo.  

our closet… and the walls… the floors.

This breaks all established patterns. Closet is the only non-plural word, the and is only carried over by one ellipsis, which doesn't even follow the rules of lists, and you change from possessive to singular. I would suggest either "our closets... our walls... our floors" or "our closests... and our walls... and our floors"  

our planet wide city

I would consider finding alternative ways to refer to Safeharbor as this one pops up an astonishing number of times.  

sometimes taking years to search a single sector.

Bit of a wording thing here; I would recommend that you change it to "sometimes spending years searching a single sector" as it implies more curiosity than slow work with low work ethics.  

Of all the wayfarers

Should or shouldn't Wayfarers be capitalized? It's automatically capitalized when linked, but that's because it's presumed article titles will, more often than not, refer to proper nouns or magic things that are emphasized by their capitalization.  

they have the shortest life expectancy, but the highest survival rate.

Can you explain this more? My initial reaction is that survival rate would be in general, but then you suggest that it isn't by saying they have a lower life expectancy. It took several minutes of puzzling for me to come to the (potentially wrong) conclusion that you could be going for "they have the shortest life expectancy, but the highest mission survival rate. These Wayfarers dedicate their lives to Safeharbor, looking to spend more of their time deep in the confines of the mysterious planet than on the surface, venturing into the unknown until the unknown claims their lives and they become one with the expanse of mystery awaiting us in the depths of the Echoes." //I know this doesn't quite fit, but it explains it nicely. And I'm leaving it because I think, for an unedited line, it sounded kind of cool  

We humans can live quite a while, now, but age still takes it tole.

You can debate with me on this one, but I would argue you don't need the comma before "now" as "We humans can live quite a while now" is fine, to my knowledge. It's a proposition so it fits? But, undebatably, you have a typo as "it" should be either "its" or "a" for it to make any sense.  

Their Echoes suits

Echoes shouldn't be plural here? Even if it's a named multiple, unless that's what you want. Also, why do you link this article twice when you seem to only ever link each article twice.  

he began with a smug grin,

I like the character of this line. But there are a few things that don't quite fit. Firstly, you use began a bit too often. It's ok to use said, but intermixing other adjectives and verbs should be done to add context. For example, you might say "Well," he began, but he was quickly cut off by the blaring of the tornado siren." Here, he isn't beginning. He is saying. The other thing is that, until this moment, words like "refusing" gave me a connotations more similar to someone being scared of than someone being so arrogant as to not even both reacting. I'm not thinking of a solution off the top of my head, but changing the wording slightly might help with keeping the character consistent here.  

The man on the platform stood in shock and horror. Miranda merely turned to the crowd.

I like this interaction, but it might be helped by a touch of alteration. For example, "the man's face quickly morphed from arrogance to shock and horror. Miranda merely turned back to the crowd, a light smirk growing over her face."  

Miranda merely turned to the crowd. "Get geared up and meet here in ten minutes. The shuttles leave in 15."

This one is nothing but personal taste. However, the general consensus is that numbers 0-100 should be written out in nontechnical writing and numbers 0-10 should be written out in technical writing. This is nontechnical writing and splitting the line like that in such close proximity is rather distracting. You should either pick to write no numbers out or most numbers out.  

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  Well. That's all. I'd say Atlas Falls was better, but this was still a good article. It's interesting how you organize the template choice as Atlas Falls didn't feel like a condition. I'd assume it's based on the prompt template, though, as these are all from summer camp. Anyway, good work!